Date: 06 May 2013 12:58 PM Title: Chapter 11: Leave
Poor Embry. Pussy move jake. But of course he is a 17 child. Moron. Least he could have done was call it off before the alter part. Guessing he hadnt phased since it happened since no one else was the wiser?
Date: 19 Aug 2010 3:31 PM Title: Chapter 12: Bitter Taste - End of Book I
this is awesome!!!! I'm so happy u got rid of Jacob. he is the most vile disgusting vain...... (Every bad word in the universe later) Are Eddie and Bells gonna meet up again soon? love the story by the way :)
Date: 16 May 2010 2:47 AM Title: Chapter 1: Book I
Pretty good story so far. A lot of grammatical mistakes. You should think about getting a beta. Your story has good potential. Also, college doesn't cost billions of dollars. If you go on any university's page, you could most likely find the estimate amount in tuition. I wouldn't be surprised if it were in the millions but the billions is really stretching it. Unless of course you go to school for years and years but even then, it's still stretching it.
Again, pretty good so far.
Date: 21 Apr 2010 12:45 PM Title: Chapter 1: Book I
where did you do the baners ??
love this story plz update
Thanks for the completment, and the banners were made in GIMP! The best creation since Internet. Its not that hard to learn, I've only been doing it for half a year. I'll update soon.
Date: 31 Mar 2010 10:40 PM Title: Chapter 12: Bitter Taste - End of Book I
This is an interesting story, I don't agree with your opinions on Jake, but that's alright. This story has piqued my interest enough to keep me from hating you about your opinion of Jake. As my sister would say, you have a right to your own opinion. It is pretty well wrote and extremely intriguing. I look forward to reading the next part of this story. I would suggest you go series, that's what I would do.
P.S. I noticed that you have multiple grammatical and spelling errors. My sister, profile name, Jadiona (she's on Fanfiction, TWCS, and Twilighted), would probably be more than willing to beta for you, if you contacted her. She writes a lot of New Moon re-writes and would probably greatly enjoy yours.
Date: 30 Mar 2010 7:40 PM Title: Chapter 5: The Godfather and Mother
ok um i dont know where u live but in arizone, a house like renee's would go for at least 400,000....maybe u forgot a zero
Your wright, I don't live in Arizona, I'm a small town southern gal, Mingo County WV. So yeah I don't know the price ranges of houses, I just threw together a big number, to me thats was a lot of money, but then agian I live off 600 dollars a month.
Date: 30 Mar 2010 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 1: Book I
So this starts off like New Moon, but changes up after that?
Yep, the first few chapters you'll see some things like the book, but after chapter 8 or so it doesnt really go by what happens in the book.
Date: 30 Mar 2010 4:19 AM Title: Chapter 4: Funeral: Life is Beautiful
okay, im a stickler for at least TRYING to maintain a semblance of reality. babies two months early with underdeveloped lungs would be in a NICU Newborn intensive care unit where they would be under lights to keep them warm and oxgyen to help develope their lungs. They wouldn't be held at all and certiantly wouldn't be allowing people to walk around with two babies in their arms, its unsafe and a liability to the hospital. At a week old, especially premie babies won't giggle, doesn't happen, they barely smile before 8 weeks old. They may have awareness and possibly eye contact but they are't interacting. Oh, and your summary, bella is 17 when Edward leave, after ten years she would be 27, not a big stretch to "not look a day over 25,"???
Thanks for the review. Also I did not know all that about premie babies, as I don't have children or am around babies. I am only 17, so I wasnt aware but lets just pretend they are speciel...as for the age thing. She'd be 28 actually, and it was meant to say 23 not 25, sorry about that. Bella is actually 18 when he leaves as well, it was because of her 18th b-day he decides leave...overprotective fool.