Date: 06 Mar 2014 6:00 PM Title: Chapter 78
FUCK...that is so NOT the way to have ended this story. Though it was tense & exciting to keep reading down to his response.
Damn....my nerves were jangling.
LOVED YOUR STORY....would love to see some kind of a sequel as to what happens to their lives.....& just 'maybe' their reinvolvement into the school.
Thanks so muches for sharing your story with me....
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Date: 05 Feb 2014 12:53 PM Title: Chapter 9: James - DAY 4
Good story but I kind of take issue with Carlisle constantly yelling. The kind of Dom who can make thousands per student at a school like this would never have to raise his voice even with the most unruly of trainees. If she had even a submissive bone in her body all he would have to do is use "The tone" of voice that will just make her bend. Don't get me wrong I get that unlike others here she didn't know what she was getting into, because James is a total douchebag and didn't give her a choice. But I take a small bit of offense at howw you are writing these supposidly professional Dominant/submissive trainers. Other then that it is an awesome story that I wish I could actually make myself get into reading, but I just get mad everytime you have Carlisle yell at her.
Date: 05 Jun 2013 4:31 PM Title: Chapter 8: Bella - DAYS 3 & 4
This is crazy. There is no way that Bella cannot have more control over herself. It is unrealistic. If a woman is afraid and in distress, there is NO WAY IN HELL that she could be able to get turned on and cum on top of it. I know that this fiction but come on. So not happening. I'm a little frustrated to tell you the truth.
Date: 05 Jun 2013 4:16 PM Title: Chapter 6: Bella - DAY 3 PART B
Why is Edward sucking of Carlisle any man for a matter of fact. Shouldn't he be with a mistress and not a master unless he is bi or gay. I don't see the reasoning behind putting him in such a scene!