Date: 07 Aug 2010 12:38 PM Title: Chapter 1
Bella is out with the fainting and all
Esme for sure didn't do it, God forbid her carpet gets dirty
Rosalie is too vain to come in contact with blood
Edward and Carlisle were talking
Lauren and Mike's alibis are kinda sketchy and fishy...
so that leaves Jasper, Alice, Emmett perhaps???, Henderson and Charlie, but why Charlie would kill her is beyond me; he finally is getting laid...
Date: 10 Jun 2010 7:10 PM Title: Chapter 1
Whoa. I've never liked Tanya but totally don't like her here. And I don't like her with Charlie. And I see she's still a witch. Can't wait to see what comes next! Great story!
OMG, that whole Tanya/Charlie scene was the evil influence of TheSpoiltOne. I totally wrote that the first time beginning with something like Tanya screaming Charlie's name and then Tanya's inner monologue about what she and Charlie were doing. TSO encouraged me to write the full lemon. That was the dirtiest smut I've ever written and the most cringe-worthy in my opinion.
Gald you liked the first chapter :)
Date: 22 Apr 2010 11:05 AM Title: Chapter 4
I am still convinced that it was Jasper. Where was he the entire time that this was all going on. I know that Carlisle didn't do it. He's way too classy to do that. Esme would never ruin her carpets. I don't think Alice is tall enoguh to reach her neck. Emmett was clearly doing something else and so was Rose. That leaves us with Edward Bella, Jasper and the help. I think it's Jasper
Date: 10 Apr 2010 1:16 AM Title: Chapter 6
oh, shit. I forgot Charlie was fucking Tanya. Damn.
Charlie is kind of a dick.
Alice. I'm saying Alice.
Date: 10 Apr 2010 1:06 AM Title: Chapter 5
Alice, Esme, Lauren, Edward, or Carlisle. Alice or Esme are my most likely choice.
Date: 10 Apr 2010 12:53 AM Title: Chapter 4
So I was reading this on FFN and noticed it hadn't updated when I was straightening up my reading list. Then I saw who the author's were listed as over there. Came to TWCS and did a search.
So...Em is innocent. He's a funny guy with the jokes. and Ben Dover...bahahaha. Secrets at work. Hmmmm
Date: 12 Mar 2010 1:06 PM Title: Chapter 3
Well, I think the murderer was at least part of the party. I do like Officer Ben D Over :) I wonder how he got through high school with a name like that. I just can tell that I had a girl in my class named F*uck - she got married 1 day after her 18th birthday, still in school to someone with a John Doe-like name ...
Date: 11 Mar 2010 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 6
QUESTION: If Tanya doesn't get paid to be the town whore, what does she do for a living? It seems she spends all her time screwing around.
So, this question raised alot of interesting questions pertaining to the case (not just my curiosity as to whether Tanya is paid for her services). Including:
- What are in the files? How did Tanya get a hold of said files?
- What happened to Tanya's phone? If Dover confiscated it from her, wouldn't he see the calls and messages from Charlie, and thus put 2 and 2 together?
- Why didn't anyone just tell Tanya to leave that night?
Great chapter. I eagerly anticipate the next installment...
Date: 03 Mar 2010 10:43 PM Title: Chapter 1
That is it, it was the Locke Ness Monster!! Not Charlie or Mike. Not going to point fingers at Bob. It doesn't point to a woman. They like the house, and haven't been with Tanya.
Really though, isn't it possible to be a group effort in the killing at this point? Esme was in the kitchen with the knifes. Charlie switched shifts with Ben Dover (and this chapter showed his feeling on that). And everyone was paired up almost and had motive to cause Tanya harm.
To take a honest guest, from my notes I would say Jasper. Can't account for him yet.
Date: 03 Mar 2010 12:06 PM Title: Chapter 6
Interesting development..Now was she murdered because of that particular info she had in her possession or did she finally get fucked over by one of her many fuck buddies disgruntled partners' who decide, enough with this bitch..Hmm...
Awesome ladies..You've left me with a lot to ponder...
Date: 03 Mar 2010 12:02 PM Title: Chapter 6
I'm still stuck on Mike. It's not Carlisle. Carlisle wouldn't be all excited about being able to spend part of his night at the Cullen Manor. (Something the killer thought earlier). The only other person it could possibly be is Bob. I guess I haven't given Bob too much thought. It does always seem to be the innocent ones...hmmm. Well, ok. I'm torn now between Mike and Bob. I'm going to have to reread this entire story to track our little butler :) You know what's seriously sad? I have actually TAKEN NOTES while reading this story and have on paper the reasons why I have eliminated certain people, and reasons why I suspect others. That's pretty pityful isn't it? Haha :) I also wrote down all the names of suspects (which was everyone in the house) and forgot poor little Bob. PS, I've stayed pretty sick since the year began and this story has kept me highly entertained. :-) Thanks for all yall do for this site. Yall are great. I am looking forward to the next fantastic chapter :-) Have a good one.
Date: 25 Feb 2010 1:42 PM Title: Chapter 4
Looks like Emmett is still in the clear and Henderson. It seems like Miss Bella hasn't been around a lot so far, could she possibly be the guilty party, I'm leaning more towards a male, by the way they grabbed Tanya's hair and yanked her head back. I really hope it's not my sweet Edward.
Date: 25 Feb 2010 12:27 PM Title: Chapter 3
This kind of let Charlie off the hook, makes it seem like it's a male who had no previous attachment to Tanya, but someone Tanya obviously wanted, sounds like a member of the Cullen family because murderer said they messed with the wrong family. By the way love the deputy's name Ben Dover (bend over), very funny LOL. Still no guess.
Date: 14 Feb 2010 6:25 AM Title: Chapter 5
Bella's POV made me put my investigative hat on. The other chapters have had me curious as to what was going on, but this chapter really made me start to think and analyse everyone's movements. From Bella's perspective, most people had wandered off by themselves prior to the murder.
- Rose stormed out
- Jasper went to the car
- Alice went to the bathroom
- Charlie went to the bathroom
- Esme went to the kitchen
I feel very sorry for Ben Dover. He has alot of movement to negotiate to try and work out where everyone was and what happened.
But i must say, i wanted to bitch-slap Tanya in this chapter. And also made me feel sick to my stomach when Charlie started talking to Bella, knowing what he was doing prior to the party.
Thanks for the update. I look forward to the nexy murder mystery installment...
...we should have a dinner party!
Date: 12 Feb 2010 5:23 PM Title: Chapter 1
alright so the first scene with tanya and charlie shows she is a very wild woman and probably doesnt mind a chick with a rubber dick soooo i am gonna go out on a limb and say it was a woman. the whole smug expression that tanya gave off when the mystery person called her into the library gives me an idea that its not the sixty year old butler or mike because who honestly would be smug about getting with that douche. okay i am gonna guess esme or alice becuase that shit would be fucking funny and ridiculous, but awesome becuase alice is the size of an infant and esme is always the prim and proper one. so i am probably way fucking off base here but thats my guess...thanks for the fun story love them mysteries.
Date: 12 Feb 2010 3:45 PM Title: Chapter 5
It has maybe eliminated some for me including, this is just a guess..Edward and Carlisle, Emmett and Rosalie, Henderson, Lauren and Bella. The jury is still out the others..
One thing I'd love now is maybe POV from either Edward, Jasper or Carlisle. This could get me in depth with Tanya and the Cullen men...
Date: 12 Feb 2010 2:04 PM Title: Chapter 5
Well now .... The killer is most likely a male. Leaving out all of the females. I assume that Tanya hadn't sleept with the killer, which leaves only the Cullens and maybe the butler. It would seem that the only male (Cullen) that was alone was Jasper .... making him my suspect as of this chapter.
Date: 11 Feb 2010 11:58 PM Title: Chapter 4
So I read the four chapters posted at one time. By chapter three I would guess the killer is a male. The Killer also likes Cullen Manor- hmmm. If I knew the layout of the house I might know more about the killer. Unclear if Emmett actually went to wash up before dinner was served. My guess I would say at this point is Edward. Probably on the wrong track but patiently waiting the next chapter- great story keep up the great work!
Date: 01 Feb 2010 3:00 AM Title: Chapter 4
i have to thank TheSpoiltOne who inadvertently lead me to this site : O)
*i was looking up the Training School*
anyway i am in awe of everything here and look forward to having a good look around...
now as for this wonderful story - WOW - loved that Charlie got some, even if it was with tartya... cant wait to hear from the others so i can work out who did it - actually was it the butler ??!! Lol
Date: 27 Jan 2010 4:41 PM Title: Chapter 1
oooh i love me a good mystery. I have no clue and i know i will hit myself upside the head when it comes out and say well duh why didn't i figure that out. Can't wait for more.
Waiting Patiently Impatiently,
OH MIA MYA
Date: 26 Jan 2010 4:37 PM Title: Chapter 4
Well I guessing the women are ruled out after a couple chapters ago when the mystery writer wrote about Tanya meeting with the killer. After reading this chapter I guess Emmett as well. That leaves Edward, Carlisle, Jasper and Charlie. Charlie is probably enjoying his f*ck buddy too much to end her so we will see. I'm enjoying this story.
Date: 26 Jan 2010 4:22 PM Title: Chapter 4
Ok...laundry can wait for this last chapter :) It seems like after this chapter it would be one of the Cullens...but what Cullen would think about feeling bad for ruining the party, but being partially happy because "The Cullen Manor [is] one hell of a place to be stuck for the evening"? My suspicions are still kinda pointing to Mike. Unless Bella found out (perhaps over heard Bob & Emmett talking) about the incriminating accusations a/b the Cullens. Maybe Bob overheard Tanya taunting Bella a/b some incriminating actions having to do w/ the Cullen men. Perhaps Bella decided she needed to kill Tanya before Tanya could ruin another relationship. Bella is so loyal and cares so much for the Cullens, there is little she wouldn't do for them. The only "off" part is that the killer just doesn't sound like Bella. But the story fits...I think. So since I've eliminated: Lauren, Rose, Emmett, Edward, Alice, Jasper, Carlisle, Esme, and "Bob"...I'm between Mike or Bella...kinda leaning more towards Bella at the moment. Update soon please! This story is too fun. Love. It.
Date: 26 Jan 2010 3:55 PM Title: Chapter 3
After this chapter I feel like the murderer is...Mike. He and Lauren are having marriage problems...something Tanya seems to have a knack for causing in relationships. Also the killer thought that Tanya was "a whore that messed with the wrong family". That statement could deal with Tanya messing up Mike & Lauren's marriage. It's obvious Lauren feels Mike has some sort of relationship w/ Tanya...considering the way she perked up to Officer "Ben Dover's" (love the name, PS) last question asking for the last time Mike saw Tanya. Also during questioning, Lauren was acting so jumpy while Mike kept his head down giving short, non responsive answers. Mike was acting as if he kept his head down, eyes lowered, and mouth shut, people wouldn't see right through him. And Lauren just seemed like a wife trying to cover up for her husband...despite being irritated at him. (We know it wasn't Lauren b/c the killer heard a scream minutes after finishing the act. And we know that scream was Laurens, since Rose said Lauren was standing over the body, screaming.) Last, my suspicions point to Mike b/c the killer thought, "Cullen Manor [is] one hell of a place to be stuck for the evening". A "Cullen" wouldn't think that about his or her own household. So assuming the "Cullens" are the same seven in the book, that should mean the list of people we can take off the suspect list are: Lauren, (and the seven Cullens) Rose, Emmett, Alice, Jasper, Edward, Carlisle, and Esme. (I'm excluding Bella as we don't know for sure if she and Edward are married or not yet...so I'm not including her as a Cullen for now).
Wow...sorry for my mini novella...I have to write all this out for it to make sense in my head. Watch me be totally wrong about Mike simply because it almost seems like yall led me to think it's him. And it's always the person you don't suspect. Watch it be Bella. :) Ok. I'm getting way to into this. I've got to go start supper, finish the laundry & finish cleaning the kitchen. This is too addictive for my own good! Well at least for this loooong review, can I ask for an update si'l vous plait? Merci! :) :)
Date: 26 Jan 2010 2:30 PM Title: Chapter 2
Obviously Rosalie is in the clear. So...my guess two chapters in is...Emmett. It's always the innocent ones...and who knows what Tanya might've said to Emmett seconds before she waas murdered to cause him to snap & kill her. Hmmm. :) That's my guess so far.