Date: 29 Jun 2013 10:31 PM Title: Chapter 24: This is Florida
So great to see an update :) wonder what Edward will plan for their date. He's already jealous of Riley so imagine how he will be if Jake shows up for a visit. How long will it be before he realizes Bella is Bella and how will he find out ? Till next time.
Date: 29 Nov 2012 9:53 AM Title: Chapter 22: Jalice Reunion
Just found this story and wanted to say I'm loving it so I hope you continue to update it. You've done a great job giving each one their own personality and being able to keep the story flowing with so many different characters all the same age.
Myself, I'm a huge Kristen fan but it is your personal choice to like or dislike whoever you want, to me that has nothing to do with a fiction story.
See you next update
Date: 21 Nov 2012 2:18 AM Title: IMPORTANT A/N
I like this story, you should carry on. Being a bit blunt - though with no malice intended at all - from a readers pov ,it gets frustrating reading a wip when updates are few and far between, you sort of lose the momentum. At least with a weekly/fortnightly update you can keep things fresh in your mind , ive lost coiunt how many ( good ) stories ive abandoned because I got tired of having to re-read the story to remember where I got to. Losing readers must be dis-heartening from the authors view - its a vicous circle. personally, I think this story is worth finishing, hope you go too.
Date: 19 Nov 2012 7:58 PM Title: IMPORTANT A/N
I am not very good avout witing reviews cof every chapter. I have followed this story from thd beginningvand looked forward to your updates. Please don't dtop writing. I promise to at least rate every chapter. Just because you don't like Kristen and I do, doesn't mean I'll boycot yoyr work. Please keep writing and I'll wofk to be a better fan. The rating for all chapters ofthis story is a ten.
Date: 19 Nov 2012 7:26 PM Title: IMPORTANT A/N
Well to be completely honest your author’s note and the subject it represents is the leading reason why us authors do not get as many reviews as we wish to have for our hard work and writing we share with everyone in the fandom.
I know my words have probably already made you mad, but I ask that you do me the honest favor in reading them completely.
First, I would never have favorite’d your story or you as an author if I didn't want to read what you wrote. The reason why I favorite stories and read them when they’re done is because too many people walk away from things.
Second, I could give two shits less if you like Kristen or not. One of the people whom I co-write with is not a Kristen lover either, doesn’t mean she3 isn’t still one of my very best friends. If someone wants to hate you for your disliking of a celebrity that is THEIR issue not YOURS. **All though you may want to think about toning down the hate and spew, because like it or not no one – not even you I am sure wants to hear a bunch of nastiness about someone they like.**
Thirdly, writing fan fiction is not just for others it is for yourself. If you are happy with it, who really cares if everyone else is. I totally get wanting great reviews, I also get loving to have people pat your back with nice words about your work, but in the end of the day and the end of the story it really only matters that you finished it for YOURSELF.
Now with all of that said, people who walk away from half way finished stories, or leave them sitting dormant are the reason why I don’t read WIPS anymore, unless I really trust the author. On TWCS alone in my over 400 favorite’d stories I have over 200 that have not been updated and are not finished for over a year. Out of that 200 probably 60 of them I was reading as they were WIPS.
Now do you get why your – should I finish it post, really rather pisses me off?
If it really matters after all of this is said and done… YES I would love it if you would be kind enough to finish this story... after all I wouldn’t have added it to my favorites if I didn’t want to read it!
Date: 19 Nov 2012 6:46 PM Title: IMPORTANT A/N
Don't write because you want to please someone else. Write because your passionate about it. I like the way you write, the mix of monologue and action is well put together. Your writing flows and allows the reader to imagine what's going on in their heads. Don't stop writing because of a lack of perceived reviews. I don't like to review unless there is something to comment on. I know it's nice to see how people are liking your story, but keep writing because YOU like what your writing.
Date: 29 Sep 2012 2:37 PM Title: Chapter 6 cleavage, and Father, daughter talks
Why won't she end up with Jacob he is sweet funny and much better than Edward. Jacob never left her and Edward did. If any relationship can be considerd toxic than Edward and Bella is. Ok sorry I had to I'm team Jacob it you can't tell. I really like your story so far. I think it really speaks to individuals who have a weight problem or one In the past. Please continue to write you have a talent. But once again JACOB is a much better choice for Bella than Edward is in any situation.
sorry couldn't help it sad and discouraged that Jake doesn't get enough credit- Katy_kat1989
Date: 11 Sep 2012 6:09 PM Title: Chapter 22: chicks before dicks
I still live your stories. My love for twilight dwindle down a little also, but I love reading the fanfinctions. I think there are a lot of great stories out there, and since twilight was what started me on fanfiction I just cant seem to be able to read from any other. I'm glad you are not stopping I love this story and I will like to see it finished.
Date: 26 Jun 2012 12:35 PM Title: Chapter 13 The roomate
No, Tori is a vegan," I said, almost immediately. Victoria smiled at me, as if she was happy I remembered...
...and Tori got a mint oyster shooter with a vegan hotdog...
You do realize that an oyster is an animal, right? A vegetarian wouldn't eat it, much less a vegan.
Sorry, it just bothered me. I like the idea of your story, but I'm out, cause I hate your Edward too much.
Best luck to you!
Date: 15 Apr 2012 11:31 AM Title: Emmybear and Bellybear part2
i love this story but oh how will eddiekins react when he finds out. oooh respond and tell me how hunger games is the fiance who went"ehh blah" when i mentioned it saw the trailer yesterday and now wants to see it.
Date: 28 Jan 2012 10:00 PM Title: Chapter 18 I don't like you
Wow, I'm surprised that Bella revealed who she really was so soon!!! What's to prevent Tanya from telling Edward???? I would have waited...if I told at all...
Well, she really couldn't care less if Edward found out, either way, it's not going to stop her from doing what she plans to do. It wouldn't work out well if he didn't know it was her anyways.
Thanks for reviewing.
Date: 24 Jan 2012 6:37 PM Title: Chapter 17 Keep telling yourself that doll face!
Rob cut his hair, big deal. I do that too. He needs to look more all hunky man. Strength and all that so he can get varied rolls. So far it is period pieces, college boy friend and the vamp thing. He will make changes as he ages and that is good.
Bel Ami will be R rated and probably had to cut things to keep it from being x. I know it will be a good roll for deminsion he just needs to be able to attract men and not sexually.
Good chapter.........time to talk to Emmett.
Date: 24 Jan 2012 6:19 PM Title: Chapter 15 Fake smiles
I know my input here will probably be in vain. I want to say I think Bella should let him sink his own ship. He will eventually. Also remember he was a teenager and he made bad decisions. We all have done this at one time or another. I for one am perfect and always have been... croak croak.. choaking now. LOL
Date: 24 Nov 2011 12:10 AM Title: Chapter 8 Beach party p2: promise
I really liked the Bella/Jacob development so much. I still can't believe that them being together won't be the game plan. *sigh*
I'm sorry :(
It would be REALLY easy to have them pair up in this story, But I don't really want her to pair up with anyone in this story because That wasn't really my purpose for writing the story to begin with.
There will be some more Jacob/Bella romancing in this, once he-and maybe Paul- come to visit them :)
Maybe in the sequel -If there is one- I can make something happen between them or It might be something between Edward/Bella, I'm not exactly sure.
Thank you for your Review and Happy Thanksgiving!♥
Date: 12 Nov 2011 1:15 PM Title: Chapter 8 Beach party p2: promise
When you said Bella might not even end up with Edward I didn't even read any more. Sorry it's your story but I only read hea Bella and Edward.
uhh...Buh bye...? I don't really know how to respond to that. I'm not writing a story full of stupid cliches like 'Edward liking Bella for a long time but being too scared to tell her.' This is reality.
The reason why I said they might not end up together is that Edward Really hurt Bella, and there is going to be a lot of drama in this story. if I wrote it to a point where they could have a happily ever after, this story would be like 50 chapters long. they ARE going to end up together at some point, I just wasn't sure if it would be in this story or a sequel.
You don't have to read this story, it won't kill me.
Thanks for reviewing :)
Date: 12 Nov 2011 1:04 PM Title: Chapter 16 Frenemys and persistant ex's
I don't know what to say. I am not liking Edward in this story. I want Bella in her new found looks to find that guy who is a "good guy". That is interested in more than her looks, her mind as well. One that will be rather loyal and has not screwed the female population of the school.
I don't remember Saying that Edward has screwed the female population of the school. I don't think you quite understand where Edward is coming from. Hopefully you'll stick around a little longer to get why Edwrad does the things he does, but if not then it was nice knowing that you at least gave the story a chance.
Thanks for reviewing
Date: 12 Nov 2011 10:19 AM Title: Chapter 16 Frenemys and persistant ex's
Waiting for Tanya and Bella to meet again.. Will Tanya know who she is?
Not right away but she'll find out ALOT sooner than Edward does, meybe even in the next chapter, I'm not sure.
Thanks for reviewing!