Date: 03 Mar 2015 4:11 PM Title: Chapter 21- Strength
Sounds like they should have all stuck together. Wait how is Edward seeing her vision when they are in the next state over??? Glad Jasper was there to take out the three nomads with Alice. Grr for laurant.
hmmm so she wasn't bitten. Interesting twist. So James and Laurant are gone....What about Victoria though?
Ugh sounds like E is making the decision to leave.....sigh.
Date: 03 Mar 2015 4:04 PM Title: Chapter 20- Triple C
Not sure they should actaully leave. But I guess them leaving will make the nomads chase them instead of taking Charlie hostage to get her to come to them. Think Jasper would have been the better choice to fight the nomads more than Carlisle. But i guess having one fighter with Bella could be smart too in case the nomads split up too. oooh the Denali's huh? Bella is def observatent; moreso than the books I'd say. oh wow....More nomad? ack!!!
Date: 03 Mar 2015 3:26 PM Title: Chapter 15- Time
Nice that Rose is being sisterly/motherly with her. Sweet change to see. Glad she is trying to have the hard conversations with him. He is too stubborn to even consider what she is saying though.
Charlie is trying. Bella needs to give him some credit and respect.
Date: 03 Mar 2015 2:57 PM Title: Chapter 14- Realizations and Lullaby's
Alice is always hyperactive. LOL. Sad that she feels that way about Charlie. She really needs to have a sitdown with him at somepoint about her feelings. lol for Charlie's neck comment though.
Like that Rose isn't being a normal Rose. oooh she can play a bit of piano, cool.
Date: 03 Mar 2015 1:50 PM Title: Chapter 12- For Everything He Was, Just As He Was
Like seeing her thought processes in this. Your difference are good too; esp about the sparkling part. Good talk but E needs to be aware of prying neighbor eyes with the speedy gonzales routine.
Date: 03 Mar 2015 12:36 PM Title: Chapter 11- Impossibleness
Kinda agree with him not having the heavy conversation at school though. Glad Alice is being supportive in her own way.
Glad you twisted the van to stop the hospital part. LOVE her reaction to laugh
Date: 03 Mar 2015 11:55 AM Title: Chapter 10- Put On Some Sneakers
Still don't like B's negativity towards Charlie. What was he supposed to do, play games with Renee over custody in court? that never turns out well. Ah well. Ugh Renee just annoys me.
love the sneaker comment.
Date: 03 Mar 2015 11:44 AM Title: Chapter 9- Endure Whatever Comes
hmm so no sparkly skin, but sun makes blood more tempting? E needs to get a break from his mind and the negative nancy thoughts. Glad B called him on his crap. So A and Em on board, wonder about J and R. ah Jake appears and bears book gifts.
Naughty peeping Edward in her room. Wonder if he's really going to accept it now or not
Date: 03 Mar 2015 11:08 AM Title: Chapter 6- Curiousity
I like the idea of twinkle or rope lights. I actually saw them for sale at Walmart last night. Cute idea from the traditional nightlight too. ohh she's had boyfriends. coolness.
Despite his view of mosters, I support his choice of those to kill. Rapists, pedophiles, and Murderers I have absolutely no pity or sympathy for. Sounds like Carlisle and everyone else has accepted B will be around. Wonder what Rose thinks this time around
Date: 03 Mar 2015 10:38 AM Title: Chapter 3- Uphill Downhill
Like that she is more accepting and happy (?) instead of timid and unsure like in the books. hmm wonder why Charlie didn't fight more? Of course most courts automatically side with the women unfortunately.
hmm she's sleepwalking now? interesting. Sigh for sulky E.
Date: 28 Mar 2012 5:04 PM Title: Chapter 15- Time
Hi, I have started your story today and I got here. Here in Italy it is time for bed, as it is quite late. You are managing to keep this Twilight deviation very interesting and insightful and i like it. Now the big issues are coming up, how could their relationship endure, if her change is not in the perspective. I am very curious.
Someone in Italy is reading my story. That's never going to get old. I'm glad you like it so far! I just finished the rewrite of new moon and I'm moving onto eclipse. I hope the saga rewrite keeps your interest enough to read them all! Thanks for reviewing.
Date: 11 Jan 2012 3:58 AM Title: Authors Note
I am amazed.
I have to admit that the story description did not sound too promising, but I decided to at least check out the first couple of chapters anyway. And then I couldn't stop reading.
I really liked the slightly more confident Bella and Edward, the more likeable Jessica and Rosalie.
Also the way Alice's visions and Bella's dreams had already prepared them for their future.
And Bella not just stumbling into the Cullens' lives, but actually looking for answers as to who she is and where she belongs.
Date: 02 Nov 2011 9:06 PM Title: Chapter 23- Epilogue
OMG usuallt I'm hesitant about rewrite but I absoluetely friggin loved this story! I LOVE LOVE LVOE this Bella. She's soo quirky and cute.
The fight scene was awesome. It was kinda better than the book.
I love how he left while shes at the hospital. It makes more sense to me that way.
I can't wait for the the second one!!!!! LOVE!!!
I'm glad you're enjoying. I'm posting the first chapter of the next book hopefully today. Check out my other stories if you'd like too! Those are all completed.
Date: 02 Nov 2011 2:31 AM Title: Chapter 23- Epilogue
Too bad Edward isn't as self-aware as Bella is. She knows what she wants and who she is, and has plans to kick his ass if ever she sees him again. I say, good for her, anger is better for you than grief, and by God, life does go on. It just makes me sad that they're not together as they should be.
The first chapter of the next book is now up! Hope you keep reading and enjoying
Date: 02 Nov 2011 2:25 AM Title: Chapter 22- A Part Missing
Okay, so he did it! And we all know how well that turned out! Just makes me want to yell and throw things, knowing how bad both of them are going to hurt until they get back together. I know how vampires live forever, but even then, life's too short for that much pain .
Date: 01 Nov 2011 4:50 PM Title: Chapter 21- Strength
Let me guess, Edward is in jackass mode, planning to leave Bella for her own good! Every time he does that, I just want to scream, damn you, ask her what she wants first! Not to mention, has anyone noticed, Victoria is still at large, so to speak? That's going to come back to haunt everybody, sure as hell! Please tell me your Edward will be smarter than everyone elses!
my edward is different in some ways but the same in this: he needs to make this mistake.
Date: 01 Nov 2011 4:36 PM Title: Chapter 20- Triple C
Six nomads? No far piling on with the vampires! First thought in my mind was, shit, what now? This can't possibly turn out well, for Bella, or the Cullens, and I hate for them to be in danger of losing each other.
Date: 01 Nov 2011 4:25 PM Title: Chapter 19- Finally
Good plan Bella came up with, and Charlie had no problem going with it. It's the pits that the nomads came along right in the middle of a major moment, but Bella and Edward both got to declare themselves. The fist kiss happened as naturally as it should, too. Nice touch, that.
Date: 01 Nov 2011 4:14 PM Title: Chapter 18- She's With Us
What a burden Edward carries, hearing all the stuff in other's minds, whether or not he wants to! He has to be frantic worrying what James will do to Bella if he gets his hands on her. Makes me want to tell him to take a deep breath and trust in the help of his family. Can't wait to see what Bella has in mind for Charlie!
Date: 17 Oct 2011 4:33 PM Title: Chapter 16- Comfortable
I'm really enjoying the dynamic between Bella and her dad. They do have a lot in common and that's both good and bad. At least they are clearing up a lot old business. Can'y wait for this hike to the picnic!
Date: 17 Oct 2011 4:21 PM Title: Chapter 15- Time
Bella always has a tough time convincing Edward that, yes, she really does want to be a vampire. Not that he ever believes her! This dinner with Charlie-cooked food, even, will be interesting if it leads into a discussion of all the years they were apart. That is really something they need to talk over.
Date: 27 Sep 2011 5:23 AM Title: Chapter 14- Realizations and Lullaby's
I am so enjoying this rebirth of this story. I fell in love with the books when a co worker bought for his wife. I was so sad when I finished reading them. I didn't want them to end. However, now I get to read another version of them. I so am looking forward to reading your series. Great job so far!
thank you! i'm glad you're enjoying and i hope you check out my other stories.
Date: 25 Sep 2011 5:21 PM Title: Chapter 14- Realizations and Lullaby's
Guess we would have to say that was a really successful introduction to the family! The Cullens seem to like Bella as much as she likes them. She fits into the group like she's always been a part of it. I'm with Edward on this point, Bella is one of a kind!
Date: 24 Sep 2011 11:41 PM Title: Chapter 13- To Be Close To You
Hook, Line & Sinker. At least no cat and mouse. Straight forward. Please don't write EMOWARD. I have grown to hate him. That person is so wrong for Bella. She needs someone that can respects her totally.
Date: 17 Sep 2011 7:04 PM Title: Chapter 13- To Be Close To You
Your Bella is quite different from SM's, but not so much you can't relate. Edward is different, too, but in a good way. I really like both of them, their thoughts and conversations. This is just a great story! See you soon!
i wanted to make them more my own and more realistic. glad you're enjoying!
Date: 08 Sep 2011 1:51 PM Title: Chapter 12- For Everything He Was, Just As He Was
This is the most natural, inevitable, dare I say , normal reaction to hearing Edward's diclosure. Bella is accepting of all that he is and is ready to confront the problems they are going to face together. Brave of both of them, I think.
Date: 04 Aug 2011 5:21 PM Title: Chapter 10- Put On Some Sneakers
I don't really hate Renee, but can't help feeling sorry for Bella at the mother she was dealt. It isn't that she doesn't care, Renee just cares about herself a bit more. Sure makes for a self-reliant, wise beyond her years, child. I wanted to hazard a guess as to the source of the lullaby going through Bella's mind. Maybe it will come out as Edward answers Bella's questions. No surprise the first one was what was he. I would want to know too.
Date: 25 Jul 2011 5:53 AM Title: Chapter 9- Endure Whatever Comes
Good for Edward, to finally recognize what Bella means to him. Now he's made up his mind, let's hope the legend she read in Jacob's book hasn't changed Bella's mind about Edward. This is getting good!
Date: 25 Jul 2011 5:35 AM Title: Chapter 8- There is Something There
Part of the attraction for Edward, I think, is how observant and intelligent Bella obviously is. The blood is just a bonus. This girl is determined to get answers to what she knows is a mystery. As she told him, weird calls to weird.
Date: 25 Jul 2011 5:24 AM Title: Chapter 7- Symphony
He's noticing all the little things about her and she's noticing all the little things about him. What could be more natural, even if one of them is supernatural? Can't wait to hear what Bella asks Edward at lunch!
Date: 25 Jul 2011 5:13 AM Title: Chapter 6- Curiousity
Your Cullens all have different colored eyes, why is that? Is it something in their diet or just because you wanted to? The Bella/Charlie interaction is very good, and her taste in books is different. Edward's history is a bit different, also. Whatever, I like this story.
Date: 25 Jul 2011 4:51 AM Title: Chapter 4- Control
I almost feel sorry for Edward,thinking he can fight Destiny. Some things are just meant to be and there's no use struggling against it. He should relax and be happy, though we know won't, at least not at first.
Date: 25 Jul 2011 4:35 AM Title: Chapter 3- Uphill Downhill
Very interesting that you have Edward having the opposite of Bella's dreams. Kind of like visions, shared with Alice, no doubt. He really has to get over this, I'm a vampire, she's a human, thing. Poor boy doesn't realize that he and Bella are inevitable!
Date: 25 Jul 2011 4:23 AM Title: Chapter 2- The Dreams
So, Bella has always dreamed of running through the forest, looking perfect and holding out her arms to someone. I wonder what it means and who it could be? I love that you have her forseeing what her future may be. This actually dovetails with Alice's vision, except for the killing part!Let's see what happens in Forks!
Date: 25 Jul 2011 4:11 AM Title: Chapter 1- The Visions
Really good set-up, JB, just the way to start this story out. I think your idea , to rewrite the entire saga is great! I'm looking forward to how your vision will differ. I have enjoyed your other srories and am confident of doing so with this one. See you later!