Date: 07 Aug 2015 8:31 AM Title: Chapter 16: Fire
this is very interesting read...
the only thing that bothers me so far is that
bella is so so desperate...
i hate that she is pleading so pathetically to edward
and he isnt ready to bite...
its ok for bella to dream and hang on to him but to keep
being oh so desperate is just sooooo pathetic.
Date: 04 Mar 2015 3:27 PM Title: Chapter 36: Letting Go
AWESOME!!! I LOVED THIS WHOLE STORY!!! ;) but i have a couple of questions that weren't answered though ;) how old were they when edwards mum died? what happened to his dad? i figured ethan was 10 years older than bella so he died at 19 maybe? but how i know it was a fight with their mums boyfriend but how did he lose and die from it? and how come edward didn't just use his mums ring for bella if she loved her so much i though or hoped she wasn't that materialistic when it came to sentiment? what was the time line of this fic i thought maybe 2 months? the only celebration was mothers day and no bithdays were mentioned? i'm looking forward to the sequel when it's finished and i hope rl isn't kicking your butt too much ;D
Date: 03 Mar 2015 4:49 AM Title: Chapter 4 : Shattered Comfort
thanks for answering a few questions ;) i love it when edward is masen because thats what he was born as in canon ;) but bella as hale? i thought it was going to be jasper as swan ;( and of edwards age being 30 ;) and their dad dying when she was 5!! i'm looking foward to more answers soon ;) thanks for sharing ;D
Date: 07 Oct 2014 8:14 PM Title: Chapter 12: Drafted
Sorry, but I think there's something strange about Bella and Jasper's relationship. Not so much Bella but Jasper acts like a jealous boyfriend sometimes. I know brothers and sisters love each other but c'mon. He centers his life around her. And does Bella not see that Jasper may have his life on hold for her? It seems like the girls he picks to date are doomed for any kind of relationship. Sort of like Edward, getting what he needs and then dismissing them with the only difference being that Edward's brutal about it and Jasper's more kind. Like letting Bella do it for him. It's all the same, use them and then lose them. I'm surprised Bella isn't more concerned about it. It's like their joined at the hip and that's not a healthy relationship. I guess I'll find out later what their deal is.
Date: 07 Oct 2014 6:07 PM Title: Chapter 7 : Sugar and Spice
Whoa! Bella not only said a mouthful but she also implied a monumental, seductive "mouthful". Throwing down the gauntlet to annihilate all of Edward's other "mouthfuls" and daring him to see her as just a little girl any longer. Way to go Bella. Edward's head is probably spinning. And the one on his shouder as well. I think Jasper just witnessed the fact that he doesn't have to protect Bella from Edward at all and that maybe Edward needs protection from Bella. She is one little spitfire when she wants to be.
That was awesome!
Date: 07 Oct 2014 4:32 PM Title: Chapter 6 : A Gracious Heart
Edward's never going to be in Jasper's good graces until he does away with the whores. He needs to prove to Jasper and himself that he can be worthy of Bella. Maybe try abstinence for a while, Edward-it couldn't hurt. I'm curious, would he still be whoring around if he and Bella were in a relationship because it seems to me that's who he is. Everyone knows all the whores drop to their knees for him. That's no accomplishment Edward, most whores will. Has he ever dated a decent girl? Bella's now heard and seen how Edward is so maybe he should start worrying that she'll run the other way. Knowing how innocent she is, she may be frightenend by these acts because she doesn't understand them. Then again, being friends w/Rose should be an education in itself so nothing should shock her. But even Rose claims that Edward's a whore so can Bella ever ever trust him? If he wants Bella bad enough, he's going to have to do the impossible. He definitely needs a plan. Great story.
Date: 25 Apr 2013 11:39 AM Title: Chapter 36: Letting Go
No arrows will be fired from this direction.
You're right, the next part is a whole new story, where they'll both get what they've waited for (and what we've waited for), for so long. It looks like Jasper and Emmett are already getting theirs. Impatient boys.
Fantastic story, can't wait for the sequel
Date: 24 Apr 2013 7:36 PM Title: Chapter 36: Letting Go
I have so loved this story and truely loved reading it can't wait for more. And I will read part 2 as all. You shouldn't care what people thin I think your story is awesome and wouldn't regret anything that u wrote BC it is wonderful.
Date: 23 Apr 2013 11:16 PM Title: Chapter 36: Letting Go
I thought that the proposal and the timing of it was perfect for them! I also thought it was the perfect way to end part one of this story and it was exactly what I would've done had this been my story but its not, although, I have loved every word you've written. Even when I wanted to strangle he or she for words that were said or should've been. I can't wait to see what you cook up for part two of this most epic love story and I hope you don't keep us waiting long,although I do understand how RL often gets in the way of joyous pursuits. This story has woven its way into my heart and I am dying to see what new adventures awaits them and their loved ones. Til next time:)
Date: 22 Apr 2013 3:02 PM Title: Chapter 36: Letting Go
It's a great story, but a little long winded. Sometimes I didn't get what the heck was going on. Maybe shorten up on the stuff going on in their heads. It's sweet, but too long and sometimes hard to follow. But I can't wait to read what happens in the sequel .
Date: 22 Apr 2013 12:33 AM Title: Chapter 36: Letting Go
All I can say is....PERFECTLY DONE!!!!! I was EXACTLY they way he should have done it, for both of them, and for US...whether some wish to believe it...or not! I am so very glad that I have been on this crazy ride from the start, even though I am horrible at reviews, mostly due to neck problems, but also, because I am just horrible...lol. Thank you so very much for this incredible story, and the absolute PERFECT completion for this amazing couple! Although...I will be waiting, maybe, or probably...NOT so patiently, for the next chapter in their wonderful story. Take care until we meet again!
Date: 21 Apr 2013 9:53 PM Title: Chapter 36: Letting Go
The thing I don't get is how old is Bella?? 12? 13?
She knows nothing of sex, only Edward is ALLOWED to teach her. She is not allowed to read, watch nor ask questions. Really??
Then to end it??
I will follow, but I hope this freaking slow burn will turn into a flame at some point..
Getting tired of, poor innocent Bella! With manwhore Edward and Jasper calling all the shots.
Date: 07 Mar 2013 6:47 AM Title: Chapter 34: From the Ground Up
I love the persistence of both jasper and Alice! His of trying not to like Alice, good luck jasper, and hers of getting him to. I couldn't agree with Alice more. It is now time for jasper to try for his happiness, but poor alice! Lol. Bella sure did spoil him. And in no way did I think he was dead. I just figured Alice massaged his crabby Ass to sleep.
Now, onto the princess and prince :) these two are just Adorable! I love all their flirting and teasing! The build up they have going on, my god! When yet and it happens it is going to be edplosive! I can't wait!
the love they have for each other is pure and true. Too bad it took so long yet it will happen and be hea! ;)
Date: 07 Mar 2013 1:31 AM Title: Chapter 34: From the Ground Up
Noo.... Jasper may be an overbearing, obnoxious ass sometimes (well, most of the time), but don't kill him off. Isabella would be devastated, her world would implode if she lost another brother, and she's so happy right now.
jasper doesn't stand a chance against the combined forces of Alice and Isabella, he WILL see what's good for him, they'll make sure of it!
Date: 02 Feb 2013 12:50 PM Title: Chapter 33: Like it Could Be Anyone Else?
**while clapping hands**
Yeah!!! He finally told her what he has been doing! I love it! Their new house....fucking swoon!
i love you's being said, forest floor kisses, full body touching, and most of all i missed yous! Awwe!!!
alice and jasper! Jasper is fighting it too much! LOL. I love Alice's tenacity! He's got to though!
Congrats on the nominations!
Date: 19 Jan 2013 11:21 PM Title: Chapter 32: All Work and No Play
And because I do, I think that all work and no play can only make Edward Masen..
... A man busy making 'yet'????
How close did I get? ;-)
Anyway, another great chapter and I will wait patiently for the next installment. Till then....
Date: 19 Jan 2013 10:45 PM Title: Chapter 31: Things
I'm still here.... I would never say anything bad to an author... it's their story, and if I don't like where a story is going, I simply stop reading it... That hasn't happened very often, mind you. I normally stick it out and am rewarded for doing so, because that's why we read fanfiction... to read a story! If people want stories to go or be told a certain way, then they should write them themselves... hey! :-) Keep up the good work, I'll keep reading. Personally, I like this Edward too and yes, he's redeemed himself a hundred times over.
Till next time
Date: 19 Jan 2013 9:48 PM Title: Chapter 30: Different
I've loved reading your story... I just wanted to let you know. I must admit that it's hard to stop clicking on the 'Next' button at the end of each chapter long enough to write a review... but I thout this was a good time...
I do read your author notes and I would expect others do too...
Anyway, I'm impatient and my finger is itching to press the 'Next' button... So... I'm off... to press... ;-)
Date: 13 Jan 2013 5:28 PM Title: Chapter 32: All Work and No Play
Grrr, with friends like Rosé, who needs enemies? She is so negative about Edward, is it because they were both very promiscuous but when Rose saw someone she wanted more with she was rejected unlike Edward?Great story, can't wait to find ut what he's up to.
Date: 13 Jan 2013 2:34 PM Title: Chapter 32: All Work and No Play
not a fan of this story but i did like the poems you wrote
Date: 29 Dec 2012 6:12 PM Title: Chapter 31: Things
Thanks for the update! Loved how we see Edward and Bella growing in their relationship, because that's how one goes and developes into "every"thing! Especially since one was, repeat was known to do despicable things!
Oh, and I so want to hear what Bella has to say to Emmett!
Thanks again for the update! Can't wait to see what happens next!
Date: 29 Dec 2012 1:51 AM Title: Chapter 31: Things
I love this Edward too and Bella, she's finally beginning to acknowledge his feelings for her run just as deep and are far from brotherly. She's a pure soul, that's why everyone loves her immediately.
Date: 25 Nov 2012 3:22 PM Title: Chapter 30: Different
Wow!!! What an amazingly beautifully well written chapter!!! This truely is a captivating & intriging story!!!! Thanks 4 all ur hard work & dedication to this story!!!! I really appreciate all ur effort & please keep up with ur updates!!! This is really an amazing story with a great story line /plot please know many of us love reading this story & I try to review as oft as possible, but I currently am reading 254 stories!!! I try to review as often as possible. Thanks for all ur hard work & dedicacation I really appreciate it!!!
Date: 25 Nov 2012 12:15 PM Title: Chapter 30: Different
Of course we still read! How could we not, when every chapter is such a treat.
Poor Bella, she's so frustrated but all good things come to she who waits and I'm positive you'll make sure it's good when it does!
Date: 25 Nov 2012 10:40 AM Title: Chapter 30: Different
Great chapter. Wonder how long YET will take?? Jasper needs a release or something. He needs to give them a break.
Wonder how long till Alice finally wins. So many questions.
Sorry you feel so frusterated. I read and enjoy this story. Hopefully it will get better for you.
Thanks for sharing with us.
Date: 25 Nov 2012 10:12 AM Title: Chapter 30: Different
Don't ever think that we are not waiting oh so impatiently for your updates! We are just trying to be polite and not hound you unmercifully for hem when we all know that real life has a bad bait of getting in the way of good ( really good) storytelling. Here is to hoping that you really do realize how much we appreciate all the time and effort you put into these updates and how much wit brightens our days when we see them waiting for s in our inboxes!
Date: 01 Oct 2012 2:28 AM Title: Chapter 8 : Masochists
I started this story a while ago, but I didn't remember why I stopped until I reread. It's a good story and it flows nicely, but I feel like Bella's character did a 360 that seemed a little too fast and unreal. It went from this innocent, holding her stuffed animal, sweet character to a foul mouthed bad girl dynamic within a chapter. From the attack at her work to the dinner where she calls Edward "slutward" it just felt like it was a whole new character all of a sudden. It's just my opinion. I feel like the dynamics of Bella's character just changed too drastically in too short of a time span.
Date: 17 Sep 2012 10:20 AM Title: Chapter 28: A Beautiful Life
Heart wrenching, loving, sharing, forgiving, and not yet all in one chapter!
Amazing work here! Get your RL situated and we will be right here when you get back!
Finallly jasper see and gets it!
I love that all 3 guys are going to "punish" the little girl! That was funny!
Date: 17 Sep 2012 8:36 AM Title: Chapter 28: A Beautiful Life
Glad to see some good come from a bad situation.
As always your writing astounds me in the emotions it provokes. I've read this chapter with tears in my eyes from the start almost to the finish, a smile broke through when she asked how much trouble she was in and the guys' responses.
I'll wait for updates as long as I have to, RL has to be attended to at some point.